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I like it in the rain no one can see I'm crying,
All the pain is hidden while I'm slowly dying,
The streaks on my face I can blame on the rain,
HIding the lies and masking the pain,
The fear in my eyes is the only trace,
As the rain clears away every tear from my face,
The water slowly drips down from my hair,
In the rain no one need know that I'm even there,
Soaked to the skin every single part of me,
I love being in the rain as I'm finally free...
Erm... What can I say I like the rain
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SketchNote598 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I don't mind, no I don't mind, I don't mind the rain. The simple things and subtleties, they always stay the same. I don't mind, that I don't mind, no I don't mind the rain. Like a widow's heart, we fall apart, but never fade away. - Rain, by Hollywood Undead
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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RainbowDash02 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
Just so.... Real... Touche!
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
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rorkey Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
Reminds me of home
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KawaiiShootingStar Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013
Such a beautiful poem~ <3 Thanks for writing this!
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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kmills95 Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow, so true.... well written.
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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OrchidWhiskers Featured By Owner May 18, 2013
Don't be sad! This is a truly lovely poem. I love the rain too! :)
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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OrchidWhiskers Featured By Owner May 21, 2013
You're welcome :)
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sparkjet Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Student General Artist
well... it.s awesome... but have u tried dancing in the rain instead of crying??? i have over calm those times that i was crying in the rain, it's time to rejoice and feel how blessed you are having those storms... ^_^
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sam7elric Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this...
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
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sam7elric Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sure thing :)
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pandafurlife Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2012
I love the rain too. People think I'm weird because I like when the sky is dark and it is raining out. I just think it's really beautiful when it rains. And so what if I'm weird, doesn't everyone have something weird about them.
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think I have many peoples allowance of weird :P
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pandafurlife Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012
Yea I don't mind being weird it's just the way I am. I mean if you don't like it don't hang around me. But your really talented!
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D :blush:
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pandafurlife Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012
Your welcome!!
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Gabriella3311 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow this is an amazing poem... I couldn't have explained it better... Good job btw :-)
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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shadicthehedgehog12 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2011
Cool poem
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks
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Naruto-Hetalia Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2011
soooooooooooo coooooooooooooooool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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noobyzgir350 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2011  Student General Artist
its sounds so familiar its so emotional
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demonyets Featured By Owner May 2, 2011
why do you like rain??
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blackartrevolution Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
amazing =)
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
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Kittyluvspie Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
I love the rain its said it suits my personality its kinda true [link]
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ForeverSixteen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2010
So beautiful ! :)
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thingsthatrhyme Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2010
wow. describe exactally what I think of the rain.!!... except in a beautiful poetic awesomeness :)
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animelover4eva77 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2010
-SIGH- I feel the same.......
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Little-Nightmares Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2010
This is beauiful, it is soo me. i hate having to hide my feelings (i hate it when people fuss and get in my stuff) i can only let go in the rain.

instant fave!
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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BlueStar225 Featured By Owner May 16, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is kinda sad and like cool at the same time
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kittiesaj Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Love you deaa...
i feel the samee...
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HumbleLeo Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2010
Love it!
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happyland22 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2010
Wow beautiful poem, yes i must say rain is a beautiful way to cover ur inner feelings.
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
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appa-appa-away Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
That's really sad, but it's connected to one of my favourite quotes: "I like standing in the rain... because no one can see me cry". I have that written on my bedroom wall :)
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andar90 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2009
I love the rain too. Everyone can relate to wanting to be alone so they can release their inner selves, and that's how I interpreted this poem. You use very strong emotional language to good effect. However, I do see some things that I question in lines one and eight. In the first line, the sentence runs together a bit. If you used a comma or inserted an extra word (" I like it in the rain because no one can see me crying (or cry as it fits the meter better)" or "I like it in the rain; no one can see me crying (you could also use a comma)). You might find that doing something like that may make the line a bit clearer.

In line eight, the line just doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem. I think that a lot of the words in that line could be eliminated. You could just say, "In the rain no one knows that I'm even there" or "No one need know that I'm even there." I do like (in line eight) that you bring back the line of "In the rain". It emphasizes it since you used it two others times throughout the poem. My only other suggestion is that you consider using a different word for 'Rain' as (despite being the focus of the poem) it can get a little repetitive. This is purely a personal choice, as you may have been trying to emphasize that word above the others. I find that openings like that in poetry often are excellent places to use poetic and expressive language. You can always say something as simple as 'drops' or 'icy drops' or 'warm liquid kisses' or 'crystalline drops' or 'falling prisms'. You get the idea, the possibilities are endless. Anyway, this is a very emotional poem that uses some very nice imagery. Good work!
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FlameTheInfernape Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
that is an awesome poem! what gave u the inspiration?
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks just the rain
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FlameTheInfernape Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
welcome!
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cartoonholic Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2009
i like it ilike rain
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
thanks
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this is my favourite,i've read this again and again i always forget to fav it and i search it with the word rain every time.but now i finally fav it.
the poem is super. well done.
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AnominusMidge Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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